keeps improving.
The hand looks better, but still slightly odd; maybe the line's in the hand are too dominant.

 

Thanks Samor. Trimmed the lines of her hand, becomes abit jaggy though...

Added 2 other pictures of what I was trying, wonder if they look any good. Okay, not done with MS Paint to be honest. I am trying to keep everything done in black and white btw.

 

add those shadows from pic #2 to pic#3 and should look interesting

 

add those shadows from pic #2 to pic#3 and should look interesting

Look rather odd if you ask me, two tries here. :eyemove:

 

the original wtf one looks best

some more about the lines on the hand; the big line in the middle....it's like it splits her hand into two (but the shadow makes it look better).

 

okay, oh hey, I made the third wtf! xD still isn't looking any better, right?

EDIT: Woops!

 

not sure. the darker parts don't look so bad now I think. Must be the shading.

 

Okay, now that we are done with the outline(I guess), lets move on to the shading. Here's what I have done so far, new pattern for her outer shirt, and tweaked shading from the original. :eyemove:

 

nice improvements; it's starting to get a professional feel to it